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These days, I prefer to be outside whenever I have free time. As you know, I just have a day off in a week but it’s not enough to do what I want to do such as having a long sleep, doing work out, hanging out with friends and so on. So I’m trying to wake up early and be outside as soon as possible. And also I try to do exercise. Furthermore, nowadays the weather is really nice to go outside. Unexpectedly, I have realized the preciousness of time after being regular employee. However before I became full timer, I used to spend my whole time indoor. Specifically, I was always a late riser and had a long rest since I thought I had an enough time. But, sometimes it made me be lazy. At times, I didn’t go outside for day off. Although my schedule makes me hard, it helps me be hard-working. Therefore I will spend my time outdoors to do many activities and I’m looking forward to this Wednesday to dine out with my mother
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Hello [이름]! ^^
Good job in writing on how you prefer to spend your free time. ^^ Being an employee taught me the importance of sleep so I spend my days off sleeping. ㅎㅎㅎ
Well, I\'ll be seeing you later so if you have questions, please don\'t hesitate to ask. ^^
All good things,
==Teacher Charlie==
These days, I prefer to be outside whenever I have free time.
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As you know, I just have a day off in a week but it’s not enough to do what I want to do such as having a long sleep, doing work out, hanging out with friends and so on. So I’m trying to wake up early and be outside as soon as possible. And also I try to do exercise. Furthermore, nowadays the weather is really nice to go outside.
>> I mentioned before that I only have a day off once a week and it is not enough to do the things I\'d like to do such as sleeping in, working out, hanging out with my friends, etc. That is why I try to wake up early and to be out and about as soon as possible while squeezing in some exercise as well. In addition, the weather is so nice nowadays.
Unexpectedly, I have realized the preciousness of time after being regular employee. However before I became full timer, I used to spend my whole time indoor. Specifically, I was always a late riser and had a long rest since I thought I had an enough time. But, sometimes it made me be lazy. At times, I didn’t go outside for day off.
>> Unexpectedly, I have realized how precious time is after being a regular employee. Before I became a full-timer, I used to spend my whole time indoors where I always woke up late and rested for long amounts of time since I thought I had plenty of it. It made me so lazy that there are times, I wouldn\'t go outside on my days off.
Although my schedule makes me hard, it helps me be hard-working. Therefore I will spend my time outdoors to do many activities and I’m looking forward to this Wednesday to dine out with my mother
>> Although my schedule is burdensome for me, it helps me become hard working. That is why I spend my free time outdoors doing as many activities as I could and besides that, I am looking forward to this Wednesday since I\'m going to dine out with my mother.
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