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2016-05-02 · 첨삭 강사 Sophia

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Happiness exits else where. It is not hide. Only we don't know the true. We are just think easily that happy is something special. But your normal life is happy itself during your days not intention. Breathing, eating, crying, laughter all these normal things mean happiness life. And loving others is also good way to live happy life.

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Hello [이름], Thank you for doing your homework. Today happiness is viewed in many different ways. Everyone defines happiness according to their personal perspectives. Each individual describes their inner feelings in a way that you can\'t compare with another. Happiness originally and logically means the inner state of well being or a pleasurable or satisfying experience. It enables you to profit from your highest: thoughts, wisdom, intelligence, common sense, emotions, health, and spiritual values in your life. Most of the happiness that we experience comes from the feeling of love. When we do not expect love to give us the happiness we seen, there will be more room for forgiveness of the imperfections and problems that always accompany love. What makes us happy is so varied. To be happy is a fleeting thing, which we enjoy so much and often want it back as soon as possible . The things that make me happy in my life can seem boring to others. My happiness is to have a shoulder to lean on when my days are going bad. Everybody in this world has the right to happiness. However, I don\'t think we should seek our happiness by all means. I don\'t agree that people should be selfish in order to get whatever they want. Of course, I\'m not saying that there aren\'t any selfish people in this world, but some people are more selfish than others. So we need to have some balance in what we want and what would make us happy. Also, we need to make sure that we don\'t burden ourselves in the sake of others\' happiness. Happiness to me is a complete love and understanding of the being that you are, and the soul that you have. When a person understands the purpose of their life, they are content, and therefore, happy.Teacher Sophia Here are your corrections: Happiness exits else where. It is not hide. Only we don\'t know the true. >> We can find happiness every where. It\'s not hiding. We just don\'t know how to find it.We are just think easily that happy is something special. >> We always think that being happy is doing something special.But your normal life is happy itself during your days not intention. >> We don\'t realize that every day gives us happiness.Breathing, eating, crying, laughter all these normal things mean happiness life. >> Our daily activity like breathing, eating, crying, laughing give us happiness.And loving others is also good way to live happy life. >> Loving others is also one of the reasons why we have a happy life.

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