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2016-05-02 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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Hello Charlie~~~~~??? we usually put question mark when we write grettings like annyeoung?, annyeounghaseyo? kkk so annyeong charlie? I don’t think that we should pay attention what they say. We can easily see many opinions of celebrities from media and there are lots of issues whether something is valuable or not. I think most of them are about nitpicking or scandal. So I think people don’t need to pay attention to them. But I know that they have power of saying as an official people and sometimes it is so persuasive. There are some good examples about it like Angelina jolie who is a goodwill ambassador of UN and Bill Gates who support poor people. I hope celebrities to notice their value and act carefully and timely with it all the time. It will bring positive influence to public. Then, we could pay attention to their opinions.

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안녕 [이름]! ^^   Oh, I see... in English though, it means differently like you\'re not sure who you\'re talking to if you end it with a question mark. ^^ Anyway, good job in this composition. If you have any questions, don\'t hesitate to ask me! Your wonderful teacher Charlie!  ㅎㅎㅎ   See you later!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==   I don’t think that we should pay attention what they say. >> I don\'t think we should pay too much attention to what celebritites say.   We can easily see many opinions of celebrities from media and there are lots of issues whether something is valuable or not. I think most of them are about nitpicking or scandal. So I think people don’t need to pay attention to them. But I know that they have power of saying as an official people and sometimes it is so persuasive. >> The media is full of opinions of celebrities about various issues whether it be valuable or not although I think most of these opinions are criticisms/nitpickings or are scandals. This is why I think that people shouldn\'t pay attention to them even though I am aware of how influential and persuasive the opinions of celebrities could be.   There are some good examples about it like Angelina jolie who is a goodwill ambassador of UN and Bill Gates who support poor people. I hope celebrities to notice their value and act carefully and timely with it all the time. It will bring positive influence to public. Then, we could pay attention to their opinions. >> However, there are some good opinions from celebrities like the Angelina Jolie who is a goodwill ambassador of the UN and Bill Gates who supports charities for poor people. I hope that other celebrities would consider their actions and words better so that they would bring a positive influence to every Tom, Dick and Harry and maybe then we would pay attention to their opinions.

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