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2016-05-26 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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I agree. In my eldest daughter, she was very slim when she was 10 years. However after she was 10 years, she ate a lot of delicious foods also she liked eat fast foods. She is not slim now. She wants go back when she was 10 years. Anyway, in my opinion, eating we become our body and health. So I will become a woman exercising.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [이름],

 

Wow! that was fast. You sent your homework for today already. I guess you had a bit of a free time. Job well done Ms. [이름]!

See you tomorrow!

 

Take care!

~T. Lynn

 

I agree.

>>correct!
In my eldest daughter, she was very slim when she was 10 years.

>>In my eldest daughter\'s case, she was very slim when she was ten years old.
However after she was 10 years, she ate a lot of delicious foods also she liked eat fast foods.

>> However when she turned 11, she ate a lot of delicious food and she also like eating fast food.
She is not slim now.

>>correct!
She wants go back when she was 10 years.

>>She wants to go back when she was ten.
Anyway, in my opinion, eating we become our body and health.

>> Anyway, in my opinion, what we eat become our body and health.
So I will become a woman exercising.

>>So I will become a woman who exercise regularly.

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