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2016-05-30 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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If my friend thinks over whether going somewhere on vacation or buying a car I would like to say her to travel where you want to go without any hesitation. I personally think traveling is necessary to grow ourselves in life because it gives us some new expeirence and it is especially good for people who are in trouble related with work, relationship, friendship and so on to solove their problem meanwhile they might get a good lesson from strangers. Even though I don't have lots of experiences there are many recommendations from others.For example, according to a blogger, he left to South America to find himself out when he was 30 and visited a lot of countries. Through the trip, he could break all stereotypes he had and also could be fearless, happy and confient in his life. And he was definitely satisfied with his experience. That's why I recommend traveling to my friend and that will be precious thing in her life as well.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! ^^   Thank you for your essay and if you notice, I spelled the word \'travelling\' as it is. Why? Well, \'traveling\' and \'travelling\' are both accepted and it all depends on which is more comfortable for you to use. ^^   See you later!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==     If my friend thinks over whether going somewhere on vacation or buying a car I would like to say her to travel where you want to go without any hesitation. >> If my friend is deciding whether to go on a vacation or to buy a car, I would advise without any hesitation for her to go on a vacation wherever she pleases.   I personally think traveling is necessary to grow ourselves in life because it gives us some new expeirence and it is especially good for people who are in trouble related with work, relationship, friendship and so on to solove their problem meanwhile they might get a good lesson from strangers. >> I personally think that travelling is necessary for us to have growth in our lives because travelling gives us new experiences and it is especially therapeutic for people who are having trouble in their personal lives where they could be able to get new insights from strangers and be able to find a solution for their problems.   Even though I don\'t have lots of experiences there are many recommendations from others.For example, according to a blogger, he left to South America to find himself out when he was 30 and visited a lot of countries. Through the trip, he could break all stereotypes he had and also could be fearless, happy and confient in his life. And he was definitely satisfied with his experience. >> Even though I don\'t have a lot of experiences in travelling, there are plenty of recommendations from others. For example, a 30-year-old blogger left South America to find himself by visiting a lot of countries. Throughout his travels, he was able to break a lot of stereotypical ideas and learned to be fearless, happy and confident about his life. He was definitely satisfied with his experiences.   That\'s why I recommend traveling to my friend and that will be precious thing in her life as well. >> This is why I would recommend travelling to my friend for it would be precious in her life as well.

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