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2016-06-02 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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The sentence on which you wirtten today's comment for me "Try not to become a man of success but a man of value" appealed to me.^^ I will do remember the sentence always. Thank you! June 6 is the Memorial Day of Korea. That is all I know that day. So I searched the internet about that day and I knew that the day is to remember soldiers killed in battle. It is important day for some people who went through the Korean war, but many people these days include me don't care about the day's meaning. It is sad situation, because If there weren't the people who died for our country, we couldn't live like now peacefully. I have to reflect on my indifference.^^; Anyway, I usually feel an attraction to the opposite sex's personality. But it is not restricted to opposite sex. When I meet a person, I am usually fascinated my direct opposite. As you know, I think you already know my nature, I am a shy person and a poor talker.^^; So I am fascianted a person who has an outgoing personality.^^ See you tomorrow!!

강사 첨삭

Hello KC!!!!

Once again, thank you for your homework.

I really had a great time with you today.Your answers are full of life. You gave a lot of insights:)

I can see that you really like to learn.

T. Jeny

 

The sentence on which you written today\'s comment for me \"Try not to become a man of success but a man of value\" appealed to me.^^

>>correct

I will do remember the sentence always.

>>correct

Thank you! June 6 is the Memorial Day of Korea.

>>correct

That is all I know that day.

>>That is all I know on that day.

So I searched the internet about that day and I knew that the day is to remember soldiers killed in battle.

>>correct 

It is important day for some people who went through the Korean war, but many people these days include me don\'t care about the day\'s meaning.

>>It is an important day for some people who went through the Korean war, but many people these days including me don\'t care about the day\'s meaning.

It is sad situation, because If there weren\'t the people who died for our country, we couldn\'t live like now peacefully.

>>It is a sad situation, because if there weren\'t people who died for our country, we couldn\'t live peacefully now. 

I have to reflect on my indifference.^^;

>>correct

Anyway, I usually feel an attraction to the opposite sex\'s personality.

>>correct 

 But it is not restricted to opposite sex.

>> But it is not restricted to the opposite sex.

When I meet a person, I am usually fascinated my direct opposite.

>>When I meet a person, I am usually fascinated to a person who is directly opposite to me.

As you know, I think you already know my nature, I am a shy person and a poor talker.^^;

>>correct 

So I am fascianted a person who has an outgoing personality.^^

>>So I am fascinated with a person who has an outgoing personality.^^
See you tomorrow!!

>>correct 

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