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2016-06-27 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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Movie and television is the most influential channels of the mass media because people can easily find it in their lives and it is clear that people like them since they always talk about what they watched something last night next day in workplace or school. There are many programs such as entertainment shows, dramas, news, documentaries etc, butI think drama is the most influential since it always has the high audience rates in every channel. I personally believe that it have had an effect to increase a divorce rates in reality. When I was young, divorcing was unusual and it was a little hard to inform to people, but as time goes by it has becoming usual thing. However the dramas also have been showing about the divorce all the while and both have been growing all the same time. I think It obviously turns up an influence of the media to people.

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Hello [이름]! ^^   Thank you for your well-thought out essay. ^^   See you later!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==   Movie and television is the most influential channels of the mass media because people can easily find it in their lives and it is clear that people like them since they always talk about what they watched something last night next day in workplace or school. >> Movies and television are one of the most influential channels of mass media because people can easily access it. It is also clear that people like it since a common topic of conversation is what one has watched the night before.   There are many programs such as entertainment shows, dramas, news, documentaries etc, butI think drama is the most influential since it always has the high audience rates in every channel. >> There are many kinds of prgrams of TV like entertainment shows, dramas, news, documentaries, etc. but I think that drama shows are the most influential among them since they have the highest viewership ratings.   I personally believe that it have had an effect to increase a divorce rates in reality. >>I personally believe that there is a negative correlation between these shows and the increasing divorce rates.   When I was young, divorcing was unusual and it was a little hard to inform to people, but as time goes by it has becoming usual thing. However the dramas also have been showing about the divorce all the while and both have been growing all the same time. I think It obviously turns up an influence of the media to people. >> When I was young, divorce was unusual and it was hard to talk about it with people but as time went by, it became a usual thing. While this was going on, divorce in dramas have also been featured more and more. I think that this is an obvious indication as to how media influences people.

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