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2016-07-01 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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Hello, teacher. I'm leaving for Japan tomorrow. I’m stoked.^^ Among these three achievements, the former two, which were related to realize the good politics in South Korea, can be interpreted as necessary conditions for the unification. Next, the last one, which was the political activities related to inter-Korean reconciliation, had a connotation of expansion of a benevolent government to other countries. Furthermore, he highlighted that the North Korean’s perception toward South Korea is changing through the Sunshine Policy. To sum it up, this paper argues that [이름] Dae-jung’s Sunshine Policy can be explained as putting Mencius’s unification theory into practice in the 21st century Korean Peninsula. After [이름] Dae-jung administration, the Sunshine Policy had been succeeded by the Roh Moo-hyun administration, one of the progressive administrations. However, this policy couldn’t have been valid since after Lee Myung-bak administration, one of the conservative administrations.

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Hi there, Kaylee! I checked your composition below. Please review my corrections. Have a safe trip to Japan! Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ Hello, teacher. >> CORRECT! I\'m leaving for Japan tomorrow. >> CORRECT! I’m stoked.^^>> CORRECT! Among these three achievements, the former two, which were related to realize the good politics in South Korea, can be interpreted as necessary conditions for the unification.>> Among these three achievements, the former two, which were related to realizing the good politics in South Korea, can be interpreted as necessary conditions for the unification. Next, the last one, which was the political activities related to inter-Korean reconciliation, had a connotation of expansion of a benevolent government to other countries. >> Next, the last one, which was the political activities related to inter-Korean reconciliation, implied the expansion of a benevolent government to other countries. Furthermore, he highlighted that the North Korean’s perception toward South Korea is changing through the Sunshine Policy.>> CORRECT! To sum it up, this paper argues that [이름] Dae-jung’s Sunshine Policy can be explained as putting Mencius’s unification theory into practice in the 21st century Korean Peninsula. >> CORRECT! After [이름] Dae-jung administration, the Sunshine Policy had been succeeded by the Roh Moo-hyun administration, one of the progressive administrations. >> After the [이름] Dae-jung administration, the Sunshine Policy had been succeeded by the Roh Moo-hyun administration, one of the progressive administrations. However, this policy couldn’t have been valid since after Lee Myung-bak administration, one of the conservative administrations. >> However, this policy had not been valid since after the Lee Myung-bak administration, one of the conservative administrations.   

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