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2016-07-29 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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My paradise is to have free time. I am so busy due to work that I don't have spare time. I leave from home at 7 AM everyday and I work from 8 AM to 9 or 10 PM for weekdays. I work every Saturday, though I want to get off from work early. I think it is best to get off from work at 6 PM. If I get off from work early, I would like to go to swim and work out. I gain the weight these days so I need to loss weight. Moreover, I would like to play with my childeren. The children's time when they are young is very short so I am very sad because I can't see a lot of my children appearance when they are young. Therefore, my paradise is to have spare time to be able to work out and to play with my children.

강사 첨삭

Hi Cool !!^^

You are such a workaholic that you

don\'t have spare or vacant time that

you can spend with your family. So, now, you are demanding for it.

Well, that is the nature of your job so there\'s nothing

you can do about it. But, at least, next week will be

your summer vacation. Just be thankful

that your company allowed you to enjoy

the vacation. :)


~~ Teacher Kris


My paradise is to have free time.

>> Correct
 I am so busy due to work that I don\'t have spare time.

>> Correct
 I leave from home at 7 AM everyday and I work from 8 AM to 9 or 10 PM for weekdays.

>> I leave from home at 7 AM everyday and I work from 8 AM to 9 or 10 PM on weekdays.
 I work every Saturday, though.

>> I work every Saturdays, though.
 I want to get off from work early.

>> Correct
 I think it is best to get off from work at 6 PM.

>> Correct
 If I get off from work early, I would like to go to swim and work out.

>> If I get off from work early, I would go swimming and do work out.
 I gain the weight these days so I need to loss weight.

>> I am gaining weight these days so I need to loose weight.
 Moreover, I would like to play with my childeren.

>> Moreover, I would like to play with my children.
 The children\'s time when they are young is very short so I am very sad  because I can\'t see a lot of my children appearance when they are young.

>> My time with my children while they are young  is very short so I am very sad because I can\'t see my children\'s appearance while they are growing up.
 Therefore, my paradise is to have spare time to be able to work out  and to play with my children.

>> Correct

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