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2016-08-08 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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Today's homework makes me happy when I think of that. If I have 100,000 US dollars, I would go on a trip in all of world like America, Germany. Actually, I don't have enough money where to go on overseas trip with my family. My wife and I would like to eat exotic foods and traditional foods of foreign countries. We really like to eat foods. My children like to eat as well. I can not get the cheese steak that I ate in Philadelpia out of my mind. I want my wife to eat that food. My wife wants to eat cheese steak in Phila as well. We love that foods like Mexican foods. My wife and I like to see a exotic scenery too. When we stay a great scenery, we feel better and fly a stress. Therefore I want to go on a world trip with my family when I would have a lot of money

강사 첨삭


Hi Cool! ^^

Your plan is absolutely fantastic! ^^

In fact, traveling around the world is an amazing experience. :)

So, that is really your dream :)

Don\'t worry, dreams do come true just keep on believing that

it will happen. :)

Thank you for your homework.

I will see you in class. :)

Take care :)


~~ Teacher Kris


Today\'s homework makes me happy when I think of that.

>> Correct
 If I have 100,000 US dollars, I would go on a trip in all of world like America, Germany.

>> If I have 100,000 US dollars, I would go on a trip to all countries in the world like America and Germany.
 Actually, I don\'t have enough money where to go on overseas trip with my family.

>> Actually, I don\'t have enough money to go on a trip overseas with my family.
 My wife and I would like to eat exotic foods and traditional foods of foreign countries. 

>> Correct
 We really like to eat foods.

>> Correct

BETTER:

>> We really like to eat or taste some foods that we have never tasted before.

 My children like to eat as well.

>> Correct
 I can not get the cheese steak that I ate in Philadelpia out of my mind.

>> Correct
 I want my wife to eat that food.

>> Correct

 My wife wants to eat cheese steak in Phila as well.

>> My wife wants to eat Cheese Steak in Philadelphia as well.
 We love that foods like Mexican foods.

>> We love that kinds of food like Mexican foods.
 My wife and I like to see a exotic scenery too.

>> My wife and I like to see exotic scenery too.

 When we stay a great scenery, we feel better and fly a stress.

>>When we stay at a great scenery, we fell better and our stresses vanish away.
 Therefore I want to go on a world trip with my family when I would have a lot of money

>> Therefore, I want to on a trip around the world with my family if I have a lot of money.

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