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On the contrary, the common Bhutanese will begin to compare themselves with the richer, and they become to feel unhappy. In conclusion, when standard of living and quality of life can be two wheels of a cart and the two factors get a long with each other harmoniously, the real happiness and satisfaction will come true for us.
In short, I wouldn't like to move to the country with the higest standard of living. Here are the reasons why I wouldn't do that.
First, it's because I love my country so much. I have visited and traveled to a lot of countries so far. There has been no one better than Korea in terms of weather conditions and environments.
Second, it's because I felt scared noticing several muder cases between gangsters and a lot of armed robberies during living in the advanced countries like the US and Canada.
Lastly, it's because someone could easily get a job as long as he strives to work even in 3D fields. Here is an examle. I have a job in my mid 60s.
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On the contrary, the common Bhutanese will begin to compare themselves with the richer, and they become to feel unhappy.
>>CORRECT!
In conclusion, when standard of living and quality of life can be two wheels of a cart and the two factors get a long with each other harmoniously,
the real happiness and satisfaction will come true for us.
>>CORRECT!
In short, I wouldn\'t like to move to the country with the higest standard of living.
>>In short, I wouldn\'t like to move to the country with the highest standard of living.
Here are the reasons why I wouldn\'t do that.
>>CORRECT!
First, it\'s because I love my country so much.
First, it\'s because I love my country so much.
>>CORRECT!
I have visited and traveled to a lot of countries so far.
>>CORRECT!
There has been no one better than Korea in terms of weather conditions and environments.
>>There has been no one better than Korea in terms of weather conditions and environment.
Second, it\'s because I felt scared noticing several muder cases between gangsters and a lot of armed robberies during living in the advanced countries like the US and Canada.
Second, it\'s because I felt scared noticing several muder cases between gangsters and a lot of armed robberies during living in the advanced countries like the US and Canada.
>>Second, it\'s because I felt scared noticing several murder cases between gangsters and a lot of armed robberies while living in advanced countries like the US and Canada.
Lastly, it\'s because someone could easily get a job as long as he strives to work even in 3D fields.
Lastly, it\'s because someone could easily get a job as long as he strives to work even in 3D fields.
>>CORRECT!
>>Lastly, it\'s because someone could easily get a job as long as he strives to work even in 3D (Difficult, Dangerous, Dirty) fields.
Here is an examle.
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Here is an example.
I have a job in my mid 60s.
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I have a job in my mid 60\'s.
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