HOMEWORK
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
Creative Writing
How would the world be different if everyone on the planet enjoyed the same rights and no discrimination existed?
I can't imagine the world without discrimination because people always fight for better life than the others.
But if the supposition is right, the world is like a heaven.
Everyone can do anything freely and a war couldn't occured.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, [이름]! ^_^
Thank you for accomplishing your homework.
I like the fact that you\'re thinking of a bigger picture such as there\'ll be no wars, etc.
I was only thinking of equality so men and women would enjoy the same priviledges. ^_-
Again, thank you and good job!
See you tomorrow!
_T. Mayleen ^^
I can\'t imagine the world without discrimination because people always fight for better life than the others.
>> Correct!
OR: ..people always fight to be better than the others.
But if the supposition is right, the world is like a heaven.
>> But if this supposition would come tre, the world will be like heaven.
Everyone can do anything freely and a war couldn\'t occured.
>> Everyone can do anything freely and no one would wage war.
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