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We need to live up to the expectations of lasting our friendship through decent manners and attitudes for others.
Can you imagine our lives without music? What if there is no air to breathe, what if there is no water to drink, and what if there is no music to relish in our lives? When I was a child, I watched a silent movie at my elementary school. Although the narator tried to discribe us actors' talks and some sounds vividly, there was no music, so I remember it was one of the most boring movies in my life.
The univers is not silent, so it is natural our lives have to be exposed to music
or music has to shake and excite us in our lives. When it comes to music, I am not that choosy. I like to listen to classics to pop songs, and I like to sing Korean popular songs and gospel songs. Our lives without music seem to be too dull.
I am not good at playing the music instruments, but I can play the piano because I learned how to play it by my sself at church in my childhood. Now
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Mr. [이름] :)
I cannot imagine life without music!
Silence makes me sad most of the time.
I listen to different kinds of music depending on my mood^^
We need to live up to the expectations of lasting our friendship through decent manners and attitudes for others.
>>We need to live up to the expectations of lasting our friendship through decent manners and attitude toward others.Can you imagine our lives without music?
>>CORRECT!
What if there is no air to breathe, what if there is no water to drink, and what if there is no music to relish in our lives?
>>CORRECT!
When I was a child, I watched a silent movie at my elementary school.
>>CORRECT!
Although the narator tried to discribe us actors\' talks and some sounds vividly, there was no music, so I remember it was one of the most boring movies in my life.
>>Although the narator tried to describe the actors\' dialog and some sounds vividly, there was no music, so I remember it was
one of the most boring movies in my life.The univers is not silent, so it is natural our lives have to be exposed to music or music has to shake and excite us in our lives.
>>The universe is not silent, so it is natural our lives have to be exposed to music or music has to shake and excite us in our lives.
When it comes to music, I am not that choosy.
>>CORRECT!
I like to listen to classics to pop songs, and I like to sing Korean popular songs and gospel songs.
>>I like to listen from classics to pop songs, and I like to sing Korean popular songs and gospel songs.
Our lives without music seem to be too dull.
>>CORRECT!I am not good at playing the music instruments, but I can play the piano because I learned how to play it by my sself at church in my childhood.
>>I am not good at playing music instruments, but I can play the piano because I learned how to play it by myself at church during my childhood.
Now
>>(Please continue^^)
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