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There seems to be no way to completely whisk away tiredness and stress from the hustle and bustle of the city life. However, my suggestion is likely to become an efficient remedy to help fight back against them.
First of all, you need to make some events to attract your expectation at least once a day, a week and a month during the tiresome city life. Those events could be, to name a few, merely watching a certain TV program on that day, meeting a close friend on the weekend, and visiting your relatives at the end of the month. Those expectations could provide yourself with some energy to defeat the stress and tiredness.
In addition, if you felt like changing something in your city life, you would be better off looking around the really hectic and crowded markets. You may stroll through the slum streets and visit some hospitals. You could find your true status from those places acknowledging yourself as one of the blessed.
Be prepared for some remedy. Luck favors the prepared.
강사 첨삭
Whew! Exploring around our city really makes a difference^^
I believe going to the orphanage and hospitals really make us realizze that we are indeed fortunate^^
See you tomorrow, Sir!
There seems to be no way to completely whisk away tiredness and stress from the hustle and bustle of the city life.
>>CORRECT!
However, my suggestion is likely to become an efficient remedy to help fight back against them.
>>CORRECT!First of all, you need to make some events to attract your expectation at least once a day, a week and a month during the tiresome city life.
>>CORRECT!
Those events could be, to name a few, merely watching a certain TV program on that day, meeting a close friend on the weekend, and visiting your relatives at the end of the month.
>>CORRECT!
Those expectations could provide yourself with some energy to defeat the stress and tiredness.
>>CORRECT!In addition, if you felt like changing something in your city life, you would be better off looking around the really hectic and crowded markets.
>>CORRECT!
You may stroll through the slum streets and visit some hospitals.
>>CORRECT!
You could find your true status from those places acknowledging yourself as one of the blessed.
>>CORRECT!Be prepared for some remedy.
>>CORRECT!
Luck favors the prepared.
>>CORRECT!
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