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2016-09-19 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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Chuseok symbolize a richness because it is a day to appreciate the joy of harvesting of the year, and also to hope to continue the good harvest again. Koreans think that all of these are thanks to their ancestors, so they hold a memorial ceremony for their ancestors with delicious foods and go 'Seong-Myo'(to visit the grave of family's ancestors). During this time, as a lot of people move at the same period, the traffic always piles up and they spend much time on the street. So some people may go Seong-Myo in advance on uncomplicated day and they may enjoy the travel on the long Chuseok holidays. One of the biggest issue during the holiday is a holiday syndrome. Chuseok is a fun day gathering the whole family, but most of the task to prepare some food is women's share. So in some cases women get a disease like a depression. Fortunately, most recently, men are trying to relieve a women's burden as they share the housework. I think the condition for happy Chuseok depend on awakening of men.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir [이름]!

How are you? I am so happy that you did this homework. Thanks a lot for writing something about Chuseok.

Well, I heard some of my female students complain about big holidays in your country.

It\'s a good thing that men are now helping in doing house chores.

Anyway, I am looking forward to hearing your stories about your holiday.

See you later!

 

~Teacher Shanee

 

Chuseok symbolize a richness because it is a day to appreciate the joy of harvesting of the year, and also to hope to continue the good harvest again.

>>> Chuseok symbolizes richness because it is a day to appreciate the joy of harvest of the year. It is also a day to hope for more good harvest.
Koreans think that all of these are thanks to their ancestors, so they hold a memorial ceremony for their ancestors with delicious foods and go \'Seong-Myo\'(to visit the grave of family\'s ancestors).

>>> OR: Koreans think that all of these are thanks to their ancestors, so they hold a memorial ceremony for their ancestors. They offer delicious foods and also do \"Seong-Myo\" which is visiting  their ancestral grave sites.

During this time, as a lot of people move at the same period, the traffic always piles up and they spend much time on the street.

>>>  Correct!

So some people may go Seong-Myo in advance on uncomplicated day and they may enjoy the travel on the long Chuseok holidays.

>>>  So some people may go in advance on nonbusy days and enjoy traveling on the long Chuseok holidays.
One of the biggest issue during the holiday is a holiday syndrome.

>>> One of the biggest issues during the holiday is holiday syndrome.

Chuseok is a fun day gathering the whole family, but most of the task to prepare some food is women\'s share.

>>> Chuseok is a family fun day but most tasks related to food preparation are mainly for women.

So in some cases women get a disease like a depression.

>>> So in some cases, women get depressed.

Fortunately, most recently, men are trying to relieve a women\'s burden as they share the housework.

>>> Fortunately, these days, men are trying to relieve women of their burden by sharing some housework.
I think the condition for happy Chuseok depend on awakening of men.

>>>  I think the condition for a happy Chuseok depends on the awakening of men.

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