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2016-09-20 · 첨삭 강사 Lisa

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teacher Lisa^^ Please correct & check a pause ~ thank you^^ A doctor didn't came to a patient's room on the pretext of being busy and asked me to attend to the patient's needs. But the patient wanted a meeting with the attending doctor and she complained a lot to me about the doctor. So I reminded him of his duties and told him that he should look at the bigger perspective of the patients catering their needs instead to relying to nurses. Rude attitude was the cause of conflict in the workplace. I want to amicably resolve a conflict. So I will try to talk by an assertive communication regarding the situation. If the dotor's rude hebavior continue, I would report to the head nurse. Why angry, it is important to see how exactly. First of all, I share patient's mind and if possible, I will accept the patient's angry feeling. And then, it is not an unconditional acceptance of the patient's demend, but I will talk my opinion, while keeping a polite attitude and accent.

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      Hello there [이름], please take note of the corrections below! See you!   teacher Lisa^^ Please correct & check a pause ~ thank you^^   A doctor didn\'t came to a patient\'s room on the pretext of being busy and asked me to attend to the patient\'s needs. But the patient wanted a meeting with the attending doctor and she complained a lot to me about the doctor. So I reminded him of his duties and told him that he should look at the bigger perspective of the patients catering their needs instead to relying to nurses. >>> I have this experience before, // when a doctor asked me to attend to one of his patient\'s needs because he was busy. // But then, // this certain patient that I attended to // wants to see his own doctor. // She has a lot of complains which gave me the reason to remind the doctor about his duties. // I told him that he should look at the bigger perspective of the patients catering their needs instead to relying it to the nurses. //Rude attitude was the cause of conflict in the workplace. I want to amicably resolve a conflict. So I will try to talk by an assertive communication regarding the situation. If the dotor\'s rude hebavior continue, I would report to the head nurse.   >>> As I have observed, //rude attitude was one of the causes of conflict in the workplace. // And I want to amicably resolve a conflict. // That\'s why I always want to try to talk in an assertive way of communication regarding a situation. // If the doctor has been portraying a rude behavior, I would report it to the head nurse. // Why angry, it is important to see how exactly. First of all, I share patient\'s mind and if possible, I will accept the patient\'s angry feeling. And then, it is not an unconditional acceptance of the patient\'s demend, but I will talk my opinion, while keeping a polite attitude and accent.   >>> Why do I need to be mad at this situation? // Maybe beacuse // it is important to look at a bigger side of it. // I always understand how a patient thinks and what she felt at this point. // But then, // I need to be polite as much as possible every time I try to open up about this kind of situation. //

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