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Why are many more people choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past?
One of the hardest pains in life can be derived from human relations, not illnesses, money and other things.
Marriage could be another beginning of human relations, that is, many more serious relations which have never experienced before.
In the past, ordinary women didn't worry about getting a job and taking a career.
Nowadays, having a job for women is not selective, but inevitable because of survival.
Young people's expectations about their soul mates have been soaring so far.
However, here are poor youths who have never gotten a stable job, who have to reimburse their college loans, and who have to take care of their old aged parents.
Marriage for them could be surely luxury.
I think this must be a negative development.
If few people are interested in marriage and childbirth, who will be responsible for making our country prosperous in the future?
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It is true that people make us happy, but I totally agree with you when you said that human relationship itself can greatly affect us. We all know that humans are made up of millions of emotions, so it is natural for us to make everything complicated TT
Thank you for this, Sir! Happy Monday!
Why are many more people choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past?
>>CORRECT!One of the hardest pains in life can be derived from human relations, not illnesses, money and other things.
>>CORRECT! (I personally love this sentence, Sir)Marriage could be another beginning of human relations, that is, many more serious relations which have never experienced before.
>>Marriage could be another beginning of human relations, that is, many more serious relations which we have never experienced before.In the past, ordinary women didn\'t worry about getting a job and taking a career.
>>CORRECT!Nowadays, having a job for women is not selective, but inevitable because of survival.
>>CORRECT!Young people\'s expectations about their soul mates have been soaring so far.
>>Young people\'s expectations about their soulmates have been soaring so far.
However, here are poor youths who have never gotten a stable job, who have to reimburse their college loans, and who have to take care of their old aged parents.
>>CORRECT!Marriage for them could be surely luxury.>>CORRECT!
I think this must be a negative development.
>>CORRECT!If few people are interested in marriage and childbirth, who will be responsible for making our country prosperous in the future?
>>CORRECT!
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