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2016-11-08 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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Water or food: which one can't you live without? Why? Water is more important for our life than food. We can live for about 30 days without food. But without water we can live for only about 7 days. When we cannot eat any food, our body gains energy from glycogen, lipid and protein storaged in our body. But water must be entered from outside. And 70% of our body consists of water. So lack of water is more fatal for human rather than lack of food.

강사 첨삭

Hi Hwa Shin!^^

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Here are my corrections:

Water or food: which one can\'t you live without? Why?

 Water is more important for our life than food.

>> Water is more important in our life than food.
 We can live for about 30 days without food.

>> Correct
 But without water we can live for only about 7 days. 

>> Correct

or

>> But without water we can only live for 7 days.

 When we cannot eat any food, our body gains energy from glycogen, lipid and protein storaged in our body.

>> When we cannot eat any food, our body gains energy from glycogen, lipid and protein storaged in our body.
 But water must be entered from outside.

>> Correct

or

>> But water must come from the outside.

 And 70% of our body consists of water.

>> Correct
 So lack of water is more fatal for human rather than lack of food.

>> Correct

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