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All things considered, I don't agree with the idea that many of medical problems come from our very sedentary life style.
In fact, when I was a child, there was no sofa, and no dinning table in the room.
We used to sit around a table when eating, which had short legs.
We were so accustomed to living sedentarily in rooms at the time.
Nevertheless, it was very rare for us to find fat people around my hometown.
Nowadays, we are used to living sedendarily using chairs, sofas and even beds, with many people being fat.
Why modern people tend to experience many of the medical problems seem to be because we don't walk as long as we did in the past.
When I went to the middle school, it took more than two hours to walk there and back.
Today, people don't like to walk even for a short distance.
Having our own cars, we began to think walking bothers us and is a waist of time.
Now, we can see many people jogging and walking around the park.
The modern life style makes us weak without workout.
강사 첨삭
You are correct, Sir!
It is because people are offered more convenient choices so we tend to get lazier TT
Have a great Monday!
All things considered, I don\'t agree with the idea that many of medical problems come from our very sedentary life style.
>>All things considered, I don\'t agree with the idea that many of medical problems come from our very sedentary lifestyle.In fact, when I was a child, there was no sofa, and no dinning table in the room.
>>In fact, when I was a child, there were no sofa and dining table in the room.We used to sit around a table when eating, which had short legs.
>>We used to sit around a table which had short legs when eating. We were so accustomed to living sedentarily in rooms at the time.
>>CORRECT!Nevertheless, it was very rare for us to find fat people around my hometown.
>>CORRECT!Nowadays, we are used to living sedendarily using chairs, sofas and even beds, with many people being fat.
>>CORRECT!Why modern people tend to experience many of the medical problems seem to be because we don\'t walk as long as we did in
the past.
>>Why modern people tend to experience many of the medical problems seems to be because we don\'t walk as long as we did in
the past.When I went to the middle school, it took more than two hours to walk there and back.
>>When I went to the middle school, it took more than two hours to walk back and forth.Today, people don\'t like to walk even for a short distance.
>>CORRECT!Having our own cars, we began to think walking bothers us and is a waist of time.
>>Having our own cars, we began to think walking bothers us and is a waste of time.Now, we can see many people jogging and walking around the park.
>>CORRECT!The modern life style makes us weak without workout.
>>The modern lifestyle makes us weak without workout.
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