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2016-11-24 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I love autumn when I can perceive flamboyant rain through the window. I like to climb the hill full of reeds being waved by a string of wind. I can imagine that there appears a foggy road between colored woods, with the summer forests pale. I love the fall when I can hear the song which is praising the meaningful second half of my life. My heart is overflowing with a joy when I look down on the yellow waved fields. I feel so cozy as if I am dating with a warmhearted woman in this season. I feel relaxed because I still spare some time to sow and grow something good in my heart in this season. I desire to read a bunch of tree leaves mailed by the lovely autumn wind all night long. I like to see fruits ripening at the spots where flowers fell. I am looking forward to singing my triumphant song when autumn of my life is stretched long with its shadow. This season recalls the first kiss to me in bushes of cosmos flowers one day at night.

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Wow! Reading this essay made me feel happy this gloomy season ^^ Thank you for turning it in, Sir! It is very poetic! Happy Thursday! I love autumn when I can perceive flamboyant rain through the window. >>CORRECT!I like to climb the hill full of reeds being waved by a string of wind. >>CORRECT! >>I like to climb the hill full of reeds being waved by a blow of wind.I can imagine that there appears a foggy road between colored woods, with the summer forests pale. >>CORRECT!I love the fall when I can hear the song which is praising the meaningful second half of my life.>>CORRECT! My heart is overflowing with a joy when I look down on the yellow waved fields. >>My heart is overflowing with joy when I look down on the yellow waved fields.I feel so cozy as if I am dating with a warmhearted woman in this season. >>CORRECT!I feel relaxed because I still spare some time to sow and grow something good in my heart in this season. >>I feel relaxed because I still spare some time to sow and grow something good in my heart these days.I desire to read a bunch of tree leaves mailed by the lovely autumn wind all night long. >>CORRECT!I like to see fruits ripening at the spots where flowers fell. >>CORRECT!I am looking forward to singing my triumphant song when autumn of my life is stretched long with its shadow. >>I am looking forward to singing my triumphant song when the autumn of my life is stretched long with its shadow.This season recalls the first kiss in bushes of cosmos flowers one day at night. >>This season recalls the first kiss in the bushes of cosmos flowers one night.

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