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2016-12-06 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I still remember the gift that my parents bought for me about 50 years ago. It was a small, pretty girl doll in a glass box. My parents might have thought that entering the high school at the top of alumni deserved it. It also meant a lot to me because I had never received that kind of expensive gift from anyone before. A few factors should be met for being special gifts. First of all, gifts should be meaningful things of acknowledgement, compensation and celebration for someone. We seem so satisfied with the gifts that we really wanted to receive, regardless of their prices. Timing is also considered as an essential factor when we send our gifts. In general, unexpected precious gifts make us so excited. However, as there is a clear difference between an email and a letter, some gifts that someone made efforts are priceless and special. Nowadays in our society, gifts or presents have been replaced by cash and gift vouchers. It is regretful that gifts keep alive among the children's birthday parties.

강사 첨삭

Good morning, Sir [이름]!

Thank you for doing your homework^^

I know that in our society, unfortunately, materialism reigns TT

Sometimes, they forget that it\'s  the thought that truly counts. ^^

I still remember the gift that my parents bought for me about 50 years ago.

>>CORRECT!
 It was a small, pretty girl doll in a glass box.

>> It was a pretty, small girl doll in a glass box.
 My parents might have thought that entering the high school at the top of alumni deserved it.

>> My parents might have thought that entering high school at the top of alumni deserved it.
 It also meant a lot to me because I had never received that kind of expensive gift from anyone before.

>>CORRECT!
 A few factors should be met for being special gifts.

>>CORRECT!
 First of all, gifts should be meaningful things of acknowledgement, compensation and celebration for someone.

>>CORRECT!
 We seem so satisfied with the gifts that we really wanted to receive, regardless of their prices.

>> We seem so satisfied with the gifts that we really wanted to receive them, regardless of their prices.
 Timing is also considered as an essential factor when we send our gifts.

>>CORRECT!
 In general, unexpected precious gifts make us so excited.

>>CORRECT!
 However, as there is a clear difference between an email and a letter, some gifts that someone made efforts are priceless

and special.

>>CORRECT!
 Nowadays in our society, gifts or presents have been replaced by cash and gift vouchers.

>>CORRECT!
 It is regretful that gifts keep alive among the children\'s birthday parties.

>> It is regretful that gifts keep children\'s birthday parties alive.

>> It is regretful that gifts keep children alive during children\'s birthday parties.

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