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2016-12-06 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I was actively involved in an organization which was guided by our teacher in high school. The organization has still been lively operated in Korean communities across the world as a NGO(Nongovernmental organization) since its foundation in the Japanese colonial period a long time ago. The cause is to follow a late patriot's thoughts which emphasized Korean people's mind reform. However, after entering KMA, I could't continue the activities in the NGO because of political neutralization in the army. The term 'NGO' is also called NPO(Nonprofit Organization) in other countries. Their activities might include human rights, environmental, improving health, or development work. Right now, I am not involved in any NGO. However, I don't think I am not actively involved in promoting and supporting a cause. Since I was born a Christian, I have been devoting myself to not only evangelizing but also helping the weak and poor through prayers, offerings and some activities.

강사 첨삭

Good morning, Sir [이름]^^

Knowing that there are still people who care really impresses me.

Keep on having that big heart of yours, see you^^

I was actively involved in an organization which was guided by our teacher in high school.

>>CORRECT!

The organization has still been lively operated in Korean communities across the world as a NGO(non-governmental organization) since its foundation in the Japanese colonial period a long time ago. 

>>CORRECT!
 The cause is to follow a late patriot\'s thoughts which emphasized Korean people\'s mind reform.

>>CORRECT!
 However, after entering KMA, I could\'t continue the activities in the NGO because of political neutralization in the army.

>>However, after entering KMA, I couldn\'t continue the activities in the NGO because of political neutralization in the army.
 The term \'NGO\' is also called NPO(Nonprofit Organization) in other countries.

>>The term \'NGO\' is also called NPO(non-profit Organization) in other countries.
 Their activities might include human rights, environmental, improving health, or development work.

>>CORRECT!
 Right now, I am not involved in any NGO.

>>CORRECT!
 However, I don\'t think I am not actively involved in promoting and supporting a cause. 

>> However, I think I am actively involved in promoting and supporting a cause. 
 Since I was born a Christian, I have been devoting myself to not only evangelizing but also helping the weak and poor through prayers, offerings and

some activities.

>>CORRECT!

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