Homework 7/10
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Doing the yoga exercise really helps us to have a healthy body and mind which are essential to our lives. Thank you for sending this eye-opening composition of yours. Let\'s talk more about this in our next class.
I\'ll see you then!
~T. Eunice
When I learned yoga I felt very happy and comfortable.
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Because, it makes me so calm in my mind and I can concentrate to my own body and also I can relax during whole yoga time.
>> Because, it makes my mind calm so I can relax my own body while concentrating during the whole yoga time.
Therefore, doing yoga is my best hobby and I enjoy it many times.
>> Therefore, doing yoga is my favorite hobby and I enjoy doing it all the time.
OR
>> I like doing yoga and I enjoy it most of the time.
Now, I don\'t learn yoga anymore, however if I realize that I need more exercise with tutor then I will go to the institute again and again.
>> Now, I am not learning yoga anymore. However, if I realize that I need more exercise with the help of an instructor then I will go to the institute again.
Thank you Eunice :)
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