Homework(7/6): The difference between natural disasters and man-made disasters

2016-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Sam. In advance, I want to say that i seem to not be able to take lesson on Friday. At that day, I will travel to Haeundae in Busan with my wife and neighbors. Busan is 2nd city in Korea and Haeundae is one of most famous beaches in Korea. I will wake up at 3 o'clock and check the result of daily job of previous day. If no errors, we will start going out right away, if else, then i have to solve the problem until it will be completely solved. Please pray for me, sam. Anyway, Regardless of errors, I can't take a lesson. we will early start because it will take a about 6 hours by my own car. See you next Monday and have a nice weekend. = BODY = the difference between natural disasters and man-made disasters is that the former can not avoid it but the latter can avoid it. But now, if we establish a system of preparedness well, we can also do avoiding the former. To avoid the latter, we need to continue educating and managing. The absence of these mind will lead to an accident someday.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Oh !!!

Simple but we need to be careful. The basics are usually forgotten so we need to recall and remember again. Great job in getting a perfect score.

I hope that you\'ll learn from this activity and suggest that you\'ll remember everything.

Don\'t worry I\'m always willing to help.

Have a nice day!!!

Thank you!!!! Enjoy your vacation!!!

 

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T. Jeny

 

Sam.

>>correct
In advance, I want to say that i seem to not be able to take lesson on Friday.

>>In advance, I want to say that I may not be able to take a lesson on Friday.
At that day, I will travel to Haeundae in Busan with my wife and neighbors.

>>correct
Busan is 2nd city in Korea and Haeundae is one of most famous beaches in Korea.

>>Busan is 2nd biggest city in Korea and Haeundae is one of the most famous beaches in Korea.
I will wake up at 3 o\'clock and check the result of daily job of previous day.

>>I will wake up at 3 o\'clock and check the results of our daily job the previous day.

If no errors, we will start going out right away, if else, then i have to solve the problem until it will be completely solved.

>>If there are no errors, we will go out right away, or else, I have to solve the problem until it will be completely solved.

Please pray for me, sam.

>>correct
Anyway, Regardless of errors, I can\'t take a lesson.

>>Anyway, regardless of the errors, I can\'t take a lesson.

we will early start because it will take a about 6 hours by my own car.

>>We will start early because it takes 6 hours of travel by car.
See you next Monday and have a nice weekend.

>>correct
= BODY =
the difference between natural disasters and man-made disasters is that the former can not avoid it but the latter can avoid it.

>>The difference between natural disasters and man-made disasters are that the former can not avoid it but the latter can avoid it.
But now, if we establish a system of preparedness well, we can also do avoiding the former.

>>But if we establish a system of preparedness well, we can avoid the former.
To avoid the latter, we need to continue educating and managing.

>>correct
The absence of these mind will lead to an accident someday.

>>The absence of these precautions will lead to an accident someday.

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