homework.(7.9)

2014-07-10 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

학생이 쓴 원문

I often feel angry about a relationship. It’s because I like to be done according to my wish. However, The relationship can’t do by myself. I like to plan doing something. When I study and doing something, I must plan. I try on talking with people. But I couldn’t bear thought of changing my plan. I can bear little. But it’s still hard for me to bear that. To suffer stress from these thoughts, I sleep more than ordinary day. they say that if a human suffer stress, it’s necessary to sleep more than ordinary day.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Eddie! Thank you for your composition today! Arguments play an important role in relationships. The most important thing is for us not to be ruled by anger. We must learn to control it in order to keep our relationship. take care and have a good day! T. JanE ^^ I often feel angry about a relationship. >> Correct It’s because I like to be done according to my wish. >> It\'s because I like things to be done according to my wish.  However, The relationship can’t do by myself. >> However, I can\'t make the relationship work by myself.  I like to plan doing something. >> I like making plans to do something.  When I study and doing something, I must plan. >> When I study and do something, I must plan.  I try on talking with people. >> I try to talk with people.  But I couldn’t bear thought of changing my plan. >> But I can\'t bear the thought of changing my plan.  I can bear little. >> I can bear it a little.  But it’s still hard for me to bear that. >> Correct To suffer stress from these thoughts, I sleep more than ordinary day. >> Since I suffer from stress due to these thoughts, I sleep more than I do on ordinary days.  they say that if a human suffer stress, it’s necessary to sleep more than ordinary day. >> They say that if a person sufferes from stress, it\'s necessary for that person to sleep more than s/he does on ordinary days.   

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