homework#7
학생이 쓴 원문
Good moring! Today is friday moring!! I think it makes everything okay to me in friday.
I want you to have a good day, too
HW#7 What makes a city great to live in? Explore your answer.
I think living in a big city have some advantages and disadvantages.
But, My opnion is that it has more advantages than living in small town.
First, in korea, medical service is really great.
Living Seoul for about 20 years, i felt that i could find hospitals anywhere.
If somebody has deseases, he can go hosipital easily in the city.
After all, I think people can meet and communicate with many other people.
It makes someone have good opportunity to learn something from some people.
An opportunity to communicate with people gives me many information.
So, it makes my sight more wider.
There are my opinions.
Thank you for teaching me English without feeling frustrated every time.
Have a good day~~
강사 첨삭
Hi Jonathan!
Thank you for your happy greeting.
I wish you\'ll have a good time, too.
Later after work, I will go home to my hometown to visit my grandma.
I am so excited to see her. It\'s just that my travel takes 7 hours by bus going there.
Traveling for me is exhausting but I hope not today.
I\'m sure you\'re also planning what to do for the weekends. Good luck!
Here are my corrections.
I think living in a big city have some advantages and disadvantages.
>> I think living in a big city has some advantages and disadvantages.
But, My opnion is that it has more advantages than living in small town.
But, My opnion is that it has more advantages than living in small town.
>> My opinion is that, it has more advantages than living in a small town.
First, in korea, medical service is really great.
First, in korea, medical service is really great.
>> First, in Korea, medical service is really great.
Living Seoul for about 20 years, i felt that i could find hospitals anywhere.
Living Seoul for about 20 years, i felt that i could find hospitals anywhere.
>> After living in Seoul for about 20 years, I think that I could find hospitals anywhere.
If somebody has deseases, he can go hosipital easily in the city.
If somebody has deseases, he can go hosipital easily in the city.
>> If somebody dies, he can easily go to hospitals in the city.
After all, I think people can meet and communicate with many other people.
After all, I think people can meet and communicate with many other people.
>> After all, I think people can meet and communicate with others.
It makes someone have good opportunity to learn something from some people.
It makes someone have good opportunity to learn something from some people.
>> It gives someone a good opportunity to learn something from other people.
An opportunity to communicate with people gives me many information.
An opportunity to communicate with people gives me many information.
>> An opportunity to communicate with people gives me much information.
So, it makes my sight more wider.
So, it makes my sight more wider.
>> So, it makes my vision wider.
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