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2016-12-14 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Our generation experienced the life that there were no TVs, no smart phones and even no telepones at home. We didn't think that we were unhappy while mailing letters and utilizing public transportations or commuting on foot. Yes, we were not unhappy, but a little bit uncomfortable. On the contrary, we could relish priceless things like touches of humanity. Some poor parents bought a windbreaker for their son so that he could keep his body warm in a cold weather. It was no wonder that the son were so delighted. A couple of days later, however, he didn't like to wear it when he went to school. His answer made the parents so sorry for him because he said his friends poked fun at him, saying "It is not a luxury brand." Our community is becoming full of people who are unsatisfied at all. In this respect, some movements are encouraging us such as a small size of wedding ceremony, newly launching a lot of thrifty shops, carpooling, and so on. Our government should be interested in making some policies related to enlightening the people, as well as economic progress.

강사 첨삭

I can clearly remember the saying:

The more you have, the more you desire.

Unfortunately, it has become rampant nowadays.

I hope you\'re okay now, Sir^^

See you tomorrow^^

Our generation experienced the life that there were no TVs, no smart phones and even no telepones at home.

>>Our generation experienced the life when there were no TVs, no smart phones and even no telephones at home.
 We didn\'t think that we were unhappy while mailing letters and utilizing public transportations or commuting on foot.
>>
We didn\'t think that we were unhappy while mailing letters and utilizing public transportation or commuting on foot.

Yes, we were not unhappy, but a little bit uncomfortable.

>>CORRECT!
 On the contrary, we could relish priceless things like touches of humanity.

>>CORRECT!
 Some poor parents bought a windbreaker for their son so that he could keep his body warm in a cold weather.

>>CORRECT!
 It was no wonder that the son were so delighted.

>> It was no wonder that the son was so delighted.
 A couple of days later, however, he didn\'t like to wear it when he went to school.

>>CORRECT!
 His answer made the parents so sorry for him because he said his friends poked fun at him, saying \"It is not a luxury brand.\"

>>CORRECT!
 Our community is becoming full of people who are unsatisfied at all.

>> CORRECT!
 In this respect, some movements are encouraging us such as a small size of wedding ceremony, newly launching a lot of thrifty shops, carpooling, and so on.

>>CORRECT!
 Our government should be interested in making some policies related to enlightening the people, as well as economic progress.

>>CORRECT!

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