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I definitely agree with you, Sir^^

It is financially comforting to have both of the parents working, but there are also some drawbacks we have to consider.

Thank you for this essay, Sir [이름]^^

No one denies that it is ideal for one parent to stay at home solely to raise the children while the other parent works.

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 If so, why should many of both parents go to work?

>>If so, why should both parents go to work?
 There could be two simple answers; money and a zeal of accomplishment.

>> There could be two simple answers: money and a zeal of accomplishment.
 In this modern society, women are no longer supposed to stay at home and take care of their children like they used to do in the past. 

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Therefore, a househusband has not been a strange word in our community recently because there exist a lot of more talented career women than men.

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 That is why even though a husband makes enough money, some woman wants to go to work.

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 Today, many of both parents have to go to work in order to survive in this competitive society.

>> Today, a lot of married couples have to go to work in order to survive in this competitive society.
 However, their children could be exposed to various kinds of bad influences because of the prolonged parents\' absence.

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 Nowadays, a new trend has been appeared in our community, which young married couples try to utilize their old aged parents in taking care of their kids.

>> Nowadays, a new trend has appeared in our community, in which young married couples try to utilize their old-aged parents in taking care of their kids.
 The old parents can get paid from them as child care fees.

>>The old parents can get paid from them as childcare fees.
 This win-win strategy is likely to pay off.

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