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2016-12-22 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

학생이 쓴 원문

There are priceless things that we could never live without in this world. Needless to say, things in nature such as air, water, a sun and moon are indispensable in our lives. However, not to mention those things related to God's gifts for us, we still have a lot of values and existence. Among them, it seems to me that my life without my family couldn't be imaginable. Family members protect, love, support and teach each other and share life's joys and sorrows not just during childhood but also throughout life. My family traveled to Cheju Island for the lunar New Year's vacation this year, which was reminiscent of our traveling in the US a long time ago. Go camping with all your family, you can not be disappointed at all and your family can bind together by it. Something in trouble in your family will be addressed while setting up a tent, making a fire and preparing for some food. Even though there exist many single parent's families nowadays, it can not be emphasized enough that the importance of family is a life or death matter to us. A sound family creates a sound community.

강사 첨삭

Thank you very much for your essay, Sir^^

Family is life, and I am very willing to give up everything for them :)
See you tomorrow, Sir! I hope your wife gets well soon^^

There are priceless things that we could never live without in this world.

>>CORRECT!
 Needless to say, things in nature such as air, water, a sun and moon are indispensable in our lives.

>>CORRECT!
 However, not to mention those things related to God\'s gifts for us, we still have a lot of values and existence.

>>CORRECT!
 Among them, it seems to me that my life without my family couldn\'t be imaginable.

>>CORRECT!
 Family members protect, love, support and teach each other and share life\'s joys and sorrows not just during childhood but also throughout life.

>>CORRECT!
 My family traveled to Cheju Island for the lunar New Year\'s vacation this year, which was reminiscent of our traveling in the US a long time ago.

>>My family traveled to Cheju Island for the Lunar New Year\'s vacation this year, which was reminiscent of our trip in the US a long time ago.
 Go camping with all your family, you can not be disappointed at all.

>>Go camping with all your family members, you will not be disappointed at all.
 Something in trouble in your family will be addressed while setting up a tent, making a fire and preparing for some food.

>> Some trouble in your family will be addressed while setting up a tent, making a fire and preparing some food.
 Even though there exist many single parent\'s families, it can not be emphasized enough that the importance of family is a life or death matter to us.

>> Even though there exist many single parent families, it can not be emphasized enough that the importance of family is a life or death matter to us.
 A sound family creates a sound community.

>>CORRECT!

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