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2017-01-03 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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My dear Rose, happy 2017! I have been to the several capital cities in the world, such as Washington DC, Beijing, Bangkok, Manila, and so on. All of them were brightly shining their unique characteristics, landscapes and histories. Even though my country is comparatively small, there are a great number of must-sees around there, like many old palaces in Seoul, many big tombs and temples in Kyungju, Cheju island, Seolak mountain, and the like. Among them, I'd like to strongly recommend foreigners to visit Seoul. Firstly, you can comfortably and cheaply move not only from the international airport to Seoul, but also during the sightseeing in Seoul, using the well-developed subway and bus systems. Secondly, as the ancient seat of Korea royalty, there are more than five huge palaces in the center of Seoul, including Kwangwhamun square well-known as the candle rallies just in front of Kyung-bok palace. Thirdly, you can enjoy shopping in very large street markets like Namdaemun, Dondaemun and Myungdong and relish lots of Korean street food out there. Lastly, many Seoulites and foreigners have visited Namsan tower to catch a glimpse of the city's landscape, including enjoying the picturesque Han river on the excursion ships. A capital city is one of must-sees in the country because they always evoke the history of glory and disgrace.

강사 첨삭

Yes, Sir! A prosperous 2017 to you and your family^^

Thanks for this first homework this year!

I totally agree that visiting the capital of a country is the greatest way to take a glimpse of its history^^

See you tomorrow, Sir!

 My dear Rose, happy 2017! 

>>CORRECT!
 I have been to the several capital cities in the world, such as Washington DC, Beijing, Bangkok, Manila, and so on. 

>>CORRECT!
 All of them were brightly shining their unique characteristics, landscapes and histories.

>> All of them were brightly shining with their unique characteristics, landscapes and histories.
 Even though my country is comparatively small, there are a great number of must-sees around there, like many old palaces in Seoul, many big tombs and temples in Kyungju, Cheju island, Seolak mountain, and the like.

>>CORRECT!
 Among them, I\'d like to strongly recommend foreigners to visit Seoul.

>>Among them, I strongly recommend foreigners to visit Seoul.
 Firstly, you can comfortably and cheaply move not only from the international airport to Seoul, but also during the sightseeing in Seoul, using the well-developed subway and bus systems. 

>> Firstly, you can comfortably and cheaply move not only from the international airport to Seoul, but also while sightseeing in Seoul, using the well-developed subway and bus systems. 
Secondly, as the ancient seat of Korea royalty, there are more than five huge palaces in the center of Seoul, including Kwangwhamun square well-known as the candle rallies just in front of Kyung-bok palace.

>>Secondly, as the ancient seat of Korea royalty, there are more than five huge palaces in the center of Seoul, including Kwangwhamun square located just in front of Kyung-bok palace and well-known as the place where candle rallies take place.
 Thirdly, you can enjoy shopping in very large street markets like Namdaemun, Dondaemun and Myungdong and relish lots of Korean street food out there.

>>CORRECT!
 Lastly, many Seoulites and foreigners have visited Namsan tower to catch a glimpse of the city\'s landscape, including enjoying the picturesque Han river on the excursion ships.

>> Lastly, many Seoulites and foreigners have visited Namsan tower to catch a glimpse of the city\'s landscape, including the picturesque Han river on the excursion ships.
 A capital city is one of must-sees in the country because they always evoke the history of glory and disgrace.

>> The capital city is one of must-sees in a country because they always evoke the history of glory and disgrace.

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