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2017-01-13 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Fortunately, I was able to experience lives in both the US and Canada years ago. Eventually, I learned the two multicultural societies were slightly different from each other. In multicultural societies, there are different models of racial integration. The US is traditionally called a "melting pot" because with time, generation of immigrants have melted together. They have almost abandoned their culture to become totally assimilated into American society. However, in Canada, cultural diversity is considered a positive thing, immigrants have always been encouraged to maintain their traditions and their native language. This model of racial integration can be described as a "salad bowl", with people of different cultures living in harmony, like the lettuce, tomatoes and carrots in a salad. Multicultural society is now a reality in Korea as immigrants exceed a million. My experience concerning multicultural society changed my fixed idea into generous and flexible one. We must learn to live together in the best possible way, putting aside which is better: a melting pot or a salad bowl.

강사 첨삭

 Hi Sir, thank you for turning in your homework^^

I envy you TT You have already experienced living in the US and Canada.

How I wish I could also experience that, even for a short time :)

Imagine how happier we could be if people learn how to respect one another^^

Fortunately, I was able to experience lives in both the US and Canada years ago.

>>Fortunately, I was able to experience living both in the US and Canada years ago.
 Eventually, I learned the two multicultural societies were slightly different from each other.

>>CORRECT!
 In multicultural societies, there are different models of racial integration.

>>CORRECT!
 The US is traditionally called a \"melting pot\" because with time, generation of immigrants have melted together.

>>The US is traditionally called a \"melting pot\" because with time, generations of immigrants have melted together.
 They have almost abandoned their culture to become totally assimilated into American society.

>>CORRECT!
 However, In Canada, cultural diversity is considered a positive thing, immigrants have always been encouraged to maintain their traditions and their native language. 

>> However, in Canada, cultural diversity is considered a positive thing, immigrants have always been encouraged to maintain their traditions and their native language. 
This model of racial integration can be described as a \"salad bowl\", with people of different cultures living in harmony, like the lettuce, tomatoes and carrots in a salad.

>>CORRECT!
 Multicultural society is now a reality in Korea as immigrants exceed a million.

>>CORRECT!
 My experience concerning multicultural society changed my fixed idea into generous and flexible one.

>>CORRECT!
 We must learn to live together in the best possible way, putting aside which is better: a melting pot or a salad bowl.

>>CORRECT!

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