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2017-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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People sometimes call me "a versatile man." I don't think I was endowed with top-notch capabilities in multiple things. However, I'm sure that I have some fairly good talents in various fields, such as painting, sports, music, calligraphy, writing, etc. My versatile talent has helped me out with dreaming, planning, preparing, competing, and winning in my life. When I was a second grader in elementary school, my class teacher had us chin up in a physical training class. All classmates made fun of me, " Shame on you! You must not have any talent of sports!" It was because I did just one chin-up as the class president. After the event, I tried to become intimate with iron bars all the time. Luck is what happens when preparation meets opportunity. My new teacher of the third grade announced that he would test how many we chinned up next month and the result would be part of our semester's grade. D-day was already behind me. Believe it or not, I did 13 chin-ups and was the winner in my class. Everyone remembered that I had done just one a year earlier. It was not the result of my talent, but my efforts beforehand. The mother of success must be unceasing efforts, not talent.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Mr. [이름]^^
I totally agree with those people who tell you you\'re versatile^^
You can spontaneously talk about many things which I am very happy about~
See you!
I really love this:
Luck is what happens when preparation meets opportunity.
People sometimes call me \"a versatile man.\"
>>CORRECT!
I don\'t think I was endowed with top-notch capabilities in multiple things.
>>CORRECT!
However, I\'m sure that I have some fairly good talents in various fields, such as painting, sports, music, calligraphy, writing, etc.
>>CORRECT!
My versatile talent has helped me out with dreaming, planning, preparing, competing, and winning in my life.
>>CORRECT!
When I was a second grader in elementary school, my class teacher had us chin up in a physical training class. 
>>CORRECT!
All classmates made fun of me, \" Shame on you! You must not have any talent of sports!\"
>>CORRECT!
It was because I did just one chin-up as the class president.
>>CORRECT!
After the event, I tried to become intimate with iron bars all the time.
>>CORRECT!
Luck is what happens when preparation meets opportunity.
>>CORRECT!
My new teacher of the third grade announced that he would test how many we chinned up next month and the result would be part of our semester\'s grade.
>>
My new teacher of the third grade announced that he would test how many we could chin up the following month and the result would be
part of our semester\'s grade.

D-day was already behind me.
>>CORRECT!
Believe it or not, I did 13 chin-ups and was the winner in my class.
>>CORRECT!
Everyone remembered that I had done just one a year earlier.
>>CORRECT!
It was not the result of my talent, but my efforts beforehand.
>>CORRECT!
The mother of success must be unceasing efforts, not talent.
>>CORRECT!

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