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2017-02-08 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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In Canada, I used to drop in Tim Hortons that a multinational fast food restaurant chain based in Canada, well known for its coffee and doughnuts. Especially, small doughnuts, Timbits were my favorite. In Korea, there are tremendous domestic and international fast food items around the country. Among them, however, three hamburger shops have been the most popular, such as McDonalds, Burger King, and Lotteria. My favorite is Burger King's chicken burger and french fries. The reason why I love chicken burger is because beef patties sometimes smell stale. In other words, they don't seem fresh. Its chicken burger provides us with its long shaped bread, so we can have it much more conveniently. Its french fries are the best among the three, because its sizes are bigger and more crispy. Some people say fast food is detrimental to our health. Nevertheless, I don't completely agree with that. What on earth can we eat if they say white rice and flour are not good or sometimes harmful. I advocates we have to eat anything evenly and equally to maintain our health.

강사 첨삭

Fast food is indeed one of our life\'s guilty pleasures!

I remember buying McDonald\'s ice cream whenever I have a bad day :)

However, eat moderately Sir! It is packed with loads of cholesterol which is harmful!

See you!

In Canada, I used to drop in Tim Hortons that a multinational fast food restaurant chain based in Canada, well known for its coffee and doughnuts.

>> In Canada, I used to drop by at Tim Hortons which is a multinational fast food restaurant chain based in Canada, well known for its coffee and doughnuts.
 Especially, small doughnuts, Timbits were my favorite.

>>CORRECT!
 In Korea, there are tremendous domestic and international fast food items around the country. 

>>CORRECT! 
Among them, however, three hamburger brands have been the most popular, such as McDonalds, Burger King, and Lotteria.

>>CORRECT!
 My fast favorite is Burger King\'s chicken burger and french fries.

>>My favorite is Burger King\'s chicken burger and French fries.
 The reason why I love chicken burger is because beef patties sometimes smell stale, in other words, they don\'t seem fresh.

>>CORRECT!
 Its chicken burger provides us its long shaped bread, so we can have it much more conveniently.

>>Its chicken burger provides us its long-shaped bread, so we can have it much more conveniently.
 Its french fries are the best among the three, because its sizes are bigger and more crispy.

>>Its French fries are the best among the three, because its sizes are bigger and crispier.
 Some people say fast food is detrimental to our health.

>>CORRECT!
 Nevertheless, I don\'t completely agree with that.

>>CORRECT!
 What on earth do we have to eat if they say white rice and flour are not good or sometimes harmful

>>What on earth do we have to eat if they say white rice and flour are not good or sometimes harmful?

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