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2017-02-09 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

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Yes it is.our country has unemployment problems like other countries.Especially this problem appears more extremely in liberal arts than in sciences and engineering,which made many students to prepare the civil service examinations which have a competition of 900 to 1,and many students to change their major to an engineering.Many High school students enter a college of engineering giving up their dream and enter the university regardless of their ability because of those problems.To have enough qualification,young people must find a suitable career,but if they are lacking in the capacity for suitable jobs,they must invest more time to prepare,study and develop their own ability.I'll also have a problem of unemployment in the near future.If i should fail in getting a job,I'll go on to Korea Polytechnics which train and coach practical technique rather than theory which I've learned from university.The reason is that our university more focus on studying than on practice needed to a job.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Lee!

 

I am grateful about what you’ve shared.

You did a great job in answering your homework.

I commend you for explaining well.

See you on Friday!

 

_Teacher Dianne ^_^

 

Yes it is.our country has unemployment problems like other countries.Especially this problem appears more extremely in liberal arts than in sciences and engineering,which made many students to prepare the civil service examinations which have a competition of 900 to 1,and many students to change their major to an engineering.

>> Yes, our country has unemployment problems like any other countries especially that this problem appears more commonly in Liberal Arts than in Science or Engineering which made many of the students to prepare the civil service examinations that has a ratio of 900 to 1 competing students. This kind of competition among students changes their mind to take Engineering as their major.


Many High school students enter a college of engineering giving up their dream and enter the university regardless of their ability because of those problems.

>> Many high school students enter college of engineering which results to giving up their dreams and enter the university regardless of their ability because of those problems.

 

To have enough qualification,young people must find a suitable career,but if they are lacking in the capacity for suitable jobs,they must invest more time to prepare,study and develop their own ability.I\'ll also have a problem of unemployment in the near future.

>> To have enough qualification, young people must find a suitable career that fits them, but if they lack the capacity for the jobs then they should invest more time in studying and developing their abilities for a certain job they want.


If i should fail in getting a job,I\'ll go on to Korea Polytechnics which train and coach practical technique rather than theory which I\'ve learned from university.The reason is that our university more focus on studying than on practice needed to a job.

>> If I fail in getting a job, I\'ll go to Korea Polytechnics which trains and coaches practical techniques rather than theories which I\'ve learned from the university. The reason is that our university focuses more on studying than on the practice needed to get a job.

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