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2017-02-17 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: *CREATIVE WRITING: What are some important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)? Use specific details and examples to explain why these qualities are important. REMEMBER: There are no rules. You can write a poem, a short story or an essay. Aim for a hundred words or aim for a hundred thousand. Just start writing, and have fun. There are some virtues that the supervisors must have to needed. First, the leadership is very important thing to boss. If the boss dosen't have the leadership, employee and company can be loss of direction, and it can cause failure of company. And another one thing which is important virtues to supervisors is catholicity. If boss dosen't accomodate employess's opinion, that organization would be priggery and old, it cause failuer of company too. So I think these two things are most important qualities that a good boss needed.

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          A fantastic Friday to you and your family! ^.^


          How are you? What are your plans this coming weekend? I hope you already have plans.


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... Teacher Paula ... ^.~



HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
*CREATIVE WRITING: What are some important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)? Use specific details and examples to explain why these qualities are important.
REMEMBER: There are no rules. You can write a poem, a short story or an essay. Aim for a hundred words or aim for a hundred thousand. Just start writing, and have fun.

There are some virtues that the supervisors must have to needed.

>> There are some virtues that a supervisor must have.

>> OR: There are some virtues that a supervisor needs to have.

First, the leadership is very important thing to boss.

>> First, leadership is a very important thing to a boss.

If the boss dosen\'t have the leadership, employee and company can be loss of direction, and it can cause failure of company.

>> If a boss doesn\'t have sense of leadership, his employees and the company he works for can have loss of direction, and it can cause the failure of the company.

And another one thing which is important virtues to supervisors is catholicity.

>> In addition, another important thing which is an important virtue that a supervisor should possess is catholicity.

If boss dosen\'t accomodate employess\'s opinion, that organization would be priggery and old, it cause failuer of company too.

>> If the boss doesn\'t consider employees\' opinion, that organization would be priggery and old, and it cause the failure of the company, too.

So I think these two things are most important qualities that a good boss needed.

>> Therefore, I think these two things are the most important qualities that a good boss needs.

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