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In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.


I think that there are two reasons.

>> CORRECT!

The first reason is the improvement of the medical technology.

>> CORRECT!

The second is people try to live long.

>> CORRECT!

The first reason is the improvement of the medical technology.

>> CORRECT!

In these days the medical technologies are fastly improving.

>> CORRECT!

Before 100years, people can\'t cure many diseases like mesles.

>> 100 years ago, people can\'t cure many diseases like measles.

But nowadays, most of diseases except AIDS and rare diseases can cure.

>> However, nowadays, most diseases except AIDS and diseases can be cured.

The second reson is people try to live long.

>> The second reason is people try to live long.

Nowadays many people execute the well being.

>> Nowadays, many people execute being well.

They regularly exercise, they eat well being foods, and etc.

>> They exercise regularly, eat healthy foods, etc.

>> OR: They exercise regularly, eat healthy foods, and so on.

Well being is the important part of their life.

>> Well being is an important part of their lives.

They want to live long.

>> They want to live long.

Also, well being foods are attentioned.

>> In addition, they give attention to healthy foods.