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2017-03-03 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Last year, AlphaGo, so called AI(artificial intelligence) won all but the fourth game in a five-game Go match with 18-time world champion Lee Sedol. As a Go player, I thought that technology could never defeat human in a Go game, even though it had already knocked human out in chess a long time ago. It is mainly because Go is a complex board game that requires intuition, creative and strategic thinking. AlphaGo's win means that technology could exceed human's ability in the near future. Technology is a wonderful thing. It allows us to stay in touch with loved ones and friends who are thousands of miles away. Meanwhile, I think technology has already been threatening manpower recently. In the security field of the army, there are lots of technology-assisted facilities and devices to help soldiers stand guard duty. Many manpower jobs began to be replaced as technology. A mixture of the two is the best approach because they can back each other up. Anyway, creating jobs for human must be the top priority for the future.

강사 첨삭

I remember seeing a movie scene wherein a person was unfortunately replaced by a machine TT

He was too depressed because he did not know where to work for his family needs TT

I agree with you, Sir, that providing job opportunities should be the priority of businesses or other establishments.

See you on Monday!

Last year, AlphaGo, so called AI(artificial intelligence) won all but the fourth game in a five-game Go match with 18-time world champion Lee Sedol.

>>CORRECT!
 As a Go player, I thought that technology could never defeat human in a Go game, even though it had already knocked human out in chess a long time ago.

>>CORRECT!
 It is mainly because Go is a complex board game that requires intuition, creative and strategic thinking.

>>CORRECT!
 AlphaGo\'s win means that technology could exceed human\'s ability in the near future.

>>CORRECT!
 Technology is a wonderful thing. 

>>CORRECT!
 It allows us to stay in touch with loved ones and friends who are thousands of miles away. 

>>CORRECT!

>>It allows us to keep in touch with loved ones and friends who are thousands of miles away. 
 Meanwhile, I think technology has already been threatening manpower recently. 

>>CORRECT!
 In the security field of the army, there are lots of technology-assisted facilities and devices to help soldiers stand guard duty.

>>CORRECT!
 Many manpower jobs began to be replaced as technology.

>>Many manpower jobs began to be replaced by technology.

>> Many manpower jobs began to be replaced as technology improved.
 A mixture of the two is the best approach because they can back each other up.

>>CORRECT!
 Anyway, creating jobs for human must be the top priority for the future.

>>CORRECT!

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