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2017-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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In fact, from my childhood, my life frame might have been set up so early. I had done my best in the army until retiring to serve my country and to take care of my family. That is why my first half of life was comparatively stable and meaningful. At the moment when I retired from the army, I made a big mistake over how to live my second half of life. I had to waste the precious 10 years chasing a false prosperity, because the way was a far cry from my previous experience and knowledge. Of course, I was able to experience a lot of priceless things necessary for my future life. Major life changes could help us improve and move forward if you were lucky. Someone says, "Luck is what happens when preparation meets opportunity." In other words, if we want to change our major life, we have to prepare for it in advance. We should not overlook our past job, experience, knowledge, network and even our taste, when deciding anything big. What I can do better than others and what I have more experience and knowledge than others should be based on our decision of major life changes. Wondering on the right road is easy to correct, but returning from the wrong road is too difficult to make a decision.

강사 첨삭

Good morning, Sir [이름]!

Whew! This paragraph moved me :)

Major life experiences might shake us, but its effect on us is priceless.

See you on Wednesday!

In fact, from my childhood, my life frame might have been set up so early.

>>CORRECT!
I had done my best in the army until retiring to serve my country and to take care of my family.

>>CORRECT!
That is why my first half of life was comparatively stable and meaningful.

>>CORRECT!
At the moment when I retired from the army, I made a big mistake over how to live my second half of life.

>>CORRECT!
I had to waste the precious 10 years chasing a false prosperity, because the way was a far cry from my previous experience and knowledge.

>>CORRECT!
Of course, I was able to experience a lot of priceless things necessary for my future life.

>>CORRECT!
Major life changes could help us improve and move forward if you were lucky.

>>CORRECT!
Someone says, \"Luck is what happens when preparation meets opportunity.\"

>>CORRECT!
In other words, if we want to change our major life, we have to prepare for it in advance.

>>CORRECT!
We should not overlook our past job, experience, knowledge, network and even our taste, when deciding anything big.

>>CORRECT!
What I can do better than others and what I have more experience and knowledge than others should be based on our decision of major life changes.

>>CORRECT!
Wondering on the right road is easy to correct, but returning from the wrong road is too difficult to make a decision.

>>CORRECT!

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