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2017-03-16 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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I believe I am the maker of my life and my life is predetermined for me as well. Without regard to my intention or will, I was born in Korea, as a son of a comparatively poor but devout family, and when Korea was extremely unstable right after the Korean War. A half of my life had already been predetermined when I was born. As a Christian, I call it the providence of God. However, my life was never fixed at that moment and situation. Instead, based on the predetermined life, my will, effort, talent, health and endurance began to work all together to make my life meaningful from when I was in elementary school at least. Having said that, the older I get, the more frequently I think I feel as if my life had continuously been guided by anyone. That is why we should try to listen to God's still voice or contact with the Holy Spirit through prayers before attempting anything. When my dear Rose corrected my English homework, you wanted me to explain something in detail to you. Here it is. It's up to me whether I can make a good or bad friend. Many thanks!

강사 첨삭

Thank you for clarifying the vague point, Sir!

I definitely believe what you said.

We should never forget to pray before doing something.

Knowing that there\'s a divine force guiding makes everything better^^

See you tomorrow!

I believe I am the maker of my life and my life is predetermined for me as well.

>>CORRECT!
 Without regard to my intention or will, I was born in Korea, as a son of a comparatively poor but devout family, and when Korea was extremely unstable right after the Korean War.

>>CORRECT!
 A half of my life had already been predetermined when I was born.

>>CORRECT!
 As a Christian, I call it the providence of God.

>>CORRECT!
 However, my life was never fixed at that moment and situation.

>>CORRECT!
 Instead, based on the predetermined life, my will, effort, talent, healt
h and endurance began to work all together to make my life meaningful from when I was in elementary school at least.

>>CORRECT!
 Having said that, the older I get, the more frequently I think I feel as if my life had continuously been guided by anyone.

>>Having said that, the older I get, the more frequent I think I feel as if my life had continuously been guided by someone.
 That is why we should try to listen to God\'s still voice or contact with the Holy Spirit through prayers before attempting anything.
>>CORRECT!
When my dear Rose corrected my English homework, you wanted me to explain something in detail to you.

>>CORRECT!
 Here it is.

>>CORRECT!
 It\'s up to me whether I can make a good or bad friend.

>>CORRECT!

Many thanks!

>>CORRECT!



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