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ESSAY: How can extreme weather conditions affect the economy and social life in countries?
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As you well known, hundreds of nano dust are in the air in Korea.

>>As you have known, hundreds of nano dusts is in Korea\'s air.
It affects people going to hospital because of the sore throat and a lung disease.

>>Many people are affected and most of them are going to the hospital because of sore throat and lung disease.

So parents do not let their children at the outside and they would like to spend their time in their home because they want to avoid seeing their children are having sick.

>>So parents do not let their children go outside, they prefer their children to stay at home to prevent them from being sick.

 But few companies get benefits since they make money owing to terrible nano dust.

>>But few companies get benefits since they make money owing the terrible nano dust.
 First, protection against dust manufactures take advantages because people prefer to wear it when they go out.

>> First, the manufactures took advantage because people prefer to wear protection against the nano dust when they go out.
 Second, the company which makes air cleaner earns a lot of money. Nowadays, people have it in their living room.

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 Third, flower shop also earns because people set up plant in their balcony to expect natural purification.

>> Third, flower shop also earns because people set up plant in their balconies for natural purification.