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2017-03-27 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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The difference between the gifts which received 20 years ago and the presents that people now are receiving could be highly observable. When it comes to presents, they remind me of a couple's story. A poor couple prepared for Christmas gifts for their spouse. The husband bought an amorous hair pin for his wife with the money that he got from selling his pocket watch. The wife purchased a glistering watch chain for her husband with the money from selling her attractive hair. On Christmas Eve, the poor couple didn't exchange their gifts, but their everlasting love. In the past, we used to choose gifts according to how we would make the recipient happier. Therefore, there must have been some implications in presents including efforts and time needed to select them. Nowadays, most people prefer to receive gifts in cash. The current trend focuses on only convenience and practicality. The poor usually present us mesmerized stories which the rich never give. Sad to say, the younger generation might sharply criticize the poor couple as incompetent and lazy.

강사 첨삭

Oh, Sir! This story made me smile on a dreary Monday morning!

This story is so touching, but I did not want to imagine what happened when they exchanged presents, ha! ha!

Nowadays, cash is indeed practical, but the thoughtfulness of scouring every store to get an appropriate present is something money could not

definitely outmatch~

The difference between the gifts which received 20 years ago and the presents that people now are receiving could be highly observable.

>> The difference between the gifts which we received 20 years ago and the presents that people now are receiving could be highly observable.
 When it comes to presents, they remind me of a couple\'s story.

>>CORRECT!
 A poor couple prepared for Christmas gifts for their spouse.

>>A poor couple prepared Christmas gifts for each other.
 The husband bought an amorous hair pin for his wife with the money that he got from selling his pocket watch.

>>CORRECT!
 The wife purchased a glistering watch chain for her husband with the money from selling her attractive hair.

>>CORRECT!
 On Christmas Eve, the poor couple didn\'t exchange their gifts, but their everlasting love.

>>CORRECT!
 In the past, we used to choose gifts according to how we would make the recipient happier.

>>CORRECT!
 Therefore, there must have been some implications in presents including efforts and time needed to select them.

>>CORRECT!

Nowadays, most people prefer to receive gifts in cash.

>>CORRECT!
 The current trend focuses on only convenience and practicality. 

>>CORRECT!
 The poor usually present us mesmerized stories which the rich never give.

>>The poor usually present us with mesmerized stories which the rich never give.
 Sad to say, the younger generation might sharply criticize the poor couple as incompetent and lazy.

>>CORRECT!

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