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2017-04-03 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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In the public park, it is not unusual young male and female students are spotted getting cozy, with them listening to music together through one earphone respectively. When I was a cadet in the military academy, I gave and took letters with an elementary female teacher. The way we could interact with each other was only a letter because telephones were very rare at the time. She was very excellent at writing letters like a literary girl. Through sending and receiving letters I experienced many precious feelings, such as excitement, irritation, enthusiasm, agony, a long patience, purity, and so on. Nowadays, we don't write a letter with the advent of the new technology. While e-mailing was already outdated a long time ago, Kakao Talk became a new trend. No one likes to send and receive long passages. A lot of unreadable abbreviations on our smartphones are being inundated. Today, tremendous smombies are unfortunately seen everywhere in our community. However, it is really positive thing that we can easily and quickly share a lot of information using Kakao Talk between friends and even family members.

강사 첨삭

As a teacher, I totally maximize the use of technology by attaching millions of files on my Gmail account and sending useful links to my dear students.

However, sometimes, I think that the emotional connection has been lost when some people just say, \"I miss you\" like a robot TT

It seems like it is a template! Ha! Ha!

Anyway, we must accept that the benefit of using technology in terms of communication is undeniable^^

Thanks, Sir! See you!

In the public park, it is not unusual young male and female students are spotted getting cozy, with them listening to music together through one

earphone respectively.

>>CORRECT!
When I was a cadet in the military academy, I gave and took letters with an elementary female teacher.

>>CORRECT!
The way we could interact with each other was only a letter because telephones were very rare at the time.

>>The way we could interact with each other was only through a letter because telephones were very rare at the time.
She was very excellent at writing letters like a literary girl.

>>CORRECT!
Through sending and receiving letters I experienced many precious feelings, such as excitement, irritation, enthusiasm, agony, a long patience, purity,

and so on.

>>CORRECT!
Nowadays, we don\'t write a letter with the advent of the new technology.

>>CORRECT!
While e-mailing was already outdated a long time ago, Kakao Talk became a new trend.

>>CORRECT!
No one likes to send and receive long passages.

>>CORRECT!
A lot of unreadable abbreviations on our smartphones are being inundated.

>>Our smartphones are inundated with a lot of unreadable abbreviations.
Today, tremendous smombies are unfortunately seen everywhere in our community.

>>CORRECT! (I like the word \"smombies\")^^
However, it is really positive thing that we can easily and quickly share a lot of information using Kakao Talk between friends and even family members.

>>However, it is a really positive thing that we can easily and quickly share a lot of information using Kakao Talk between friends and even family

members.

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