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2017-04-13 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: *CREATIVE WRITING: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teen-aged children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. REMEMBER: There are no rules. You can write a poem, a short story or an essay. Aim for a hundred words or aim for a hundred thousand. Just start writing, and have fun. I agree. It's because high teen is never young age, (of course it's never old either.) and it's time to leaves them to make a choice for their life. If they need a help, parent and other adult relatives can help and consult and suggest the way, but the choice is an absolute share of their children.

강사 첨삭

Dear [이름],

A thrilling Thursday for us! ^.^

First of all, I would like to thank you for not stopping making your compositions! ^^
This writing that you made is well-composed.
However, check the suggestions that I placed below for more improvement.

That\'s all for now! ^^
Happy reading! ^^,
See you! ^^.

... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

>> CORRECT!

It\'s because high teen is never young age, (of course it\'s never old either.) and it\'s time to leaves them to make a choice for their life.

>> It\'s because high teen is never a young age, (of course, it\'s never old either) and it\'s time to leave them to make their choices for their lives.

If they need a help, parent and other adult relatives can help and consult and suggest the way, but the choice is an absolute share of their children.

>> If they need help, parents and other adult relatives can help, consult and suggest ways, but the choices that are made are the absolute share of their children.

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