homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Writing Exercise: What do you wish you could change about the world?
I want to change about the 'study' Because nowadays If i'm study well, go to a good university, and I can live comfortably. So This makes it difficult to live with people who have a talent or enthusiasm.
강사 첨삭
Good evening, [이름]!(^_^)
A happy Tuesday to you!
You can still pursue your talent or your passion while studying.
It\'s good to have a positive outlook in live, so I hope you\'ll be more optimistic.
We can talk about your dreams or ambitions tomorrow.
See you then! :)
_T. Mayleen ^.^
I want to change about the \'study\' Because nowadays If i\'m study well, go to a good university, and I can live comfortably.
>> I want to change the idea of \'studying\' that I can only live a comfortable if I\'ll go to a good university.
So This makes it difficult to live with people who have a talent or enthusiasm.
>> This makes it difficult for people who are talented but are not good academically.
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