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2017-04-13 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I think forced volunteerism is nesessary because it makes students have a chance to realize something in life. When I was in school, spending some time on volunteering was a duty. So I did volunteer work with my friend and I made my life worth living. Therefore, forced volunteerism can motivate students to volunteer by themselves in the future.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]! ^_^
Thanks for writing in our composition board today even if your hands are full.

I truly appreciate your effort.

I agree when you said volunteering can change a person\'s perspective in life.

Mine did and everyday I am thankful for it.

Volunteering made me more compassionate and kind towards the less fortunate.

I came to realize that I am beyond blessed.

Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great.
Let\'s talk again on Monday. :)
Take care always.
~Teacher Charry :)

I think forced volunteerism is nesessary because it makes students have a chance to realize something in life.

>> I think forced volunteerism is necessary because it makes students have a chance to realize something in life.

OR >> I think forced volunteerism is necessary because it gives students a chance to realize something in life.
When I was in school, spending some time on volunteering was a duty.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> When I was in school, volunteering was mandatory.
So I did volunteer work with my friend and I made my life worth living.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> That\'s why I volunteered with my friend and it changed my life for the better.
Therefore, forced volunteerism can motivate students to volunteer by themselves in the future.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> In conclusion, forced volunteerism can motivate students to volunteer by themselves in the future.

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