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The educating children earlier in life can help them perform better in school in short-term, but it can have an adverse effect on children.

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First of all, academic performance depends on many other factors such as logical ability, mathmatics ability and so on.

>>  First of all, academic performance depends on many other factors such as logical ability, Mathematical ability and so on.

If early education is stop at the reading skill, it doesn\'t have a huge impact on children\'s later academic performance.

>> If the early education stopped on the reading skill, it doesn\'t have a huge impact on the children\'s academic performance.
Second, the prim factor of what effect children\'s academic performance is their\'s effort for study.

>> The second prime factor is their effort in studying.

Commonly, children will have studied at leat for 10 years, so in order to study hard during that period, their intention and motivation to study are important.

>> Commonly, the children study for at least 10 years so they need motivation.
According to the research done in Korea, performance of children who study early was not higher than that of others.

>> According to the research study conducted in Korea, the children who studied early didn\'t do good in school than other children.

Especially, their creativity was behind that of other children.

>> Their creativity was behind than the other children.

Also, they had a mental disease like a depression.

>> They had a mental disease and depression.
In conclusion, it is not good to compel children to study early because children can learn more when they hang out.

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