HOMEWORK

2017-04-18 · 첨삭 강사 Ivah

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: ESSAY: As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers, and discuss at least one problem that may happen. hello teacher Happy Easter holiday ~ i did the homework that you gave me just before world technology are growing and evolving every day so machine might replace people in the future i think hospitality job will disappear like cashier and taxi driver also factory workers will soon disappear i heard that machine already has replaced the factory workers so they have lost gradually of work after that umemployed people will increase and then they may riot as destoying machines

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]!

Happy Monday!

I hope you had a wonderful day today.

It seems that you are energetic enough to finish these homework even having a tight schedule.

Thank you very much for answering! ^^

~ Teacher Ivah


World technology are growing and evolving every day

>> The world of technology are growing and evolving each day.


So machine might replace people in the future

>> And machines might replace people in the future.


I think hospitality job will disappear like cashier and taxi driver.

>> I think jobs like in the areas of hospitality will be replaced by robots as well as the cashiers and the taxi drivers.


Also factory workers will soon disappear.

>> Also, factory workers might soon be replaced by robots.


I heard that machine already has replaced the factory workers.

>> I have heard that machines has already replaced the factory workers.


So they have lost gradually of work after that unemployed people will increase and then they may riot as destroying machines.

>> And if human work will be replaced by robots, then unemployment may rise and may lead to violence such as riots and destroying the machines.

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