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Modern technology has utterly changed a worker\'s circumstance.

>> Modern technology has utterly changed a worker\'s condition.

One example is worker\'s using a computer and internet.

>> A great example is the use of computer and Internet.

Previously, office worker had to make reports by writing in their hand, and in order to search required information they must have gone to a library, so it took several month.

>> In the past, a worker needs to have make a report by handwriting. He or she also needs to go to the library to search some information and it will take him or her to accomplish everything in several months.

However, at the present time, we can do the same work within several days.

>> However, at the present time, we can only do the same work several days.
There are many people who have adverse idea about this situation because humans rely too much on technology.

>> There are many people ho have adverse idea about this issue because humans rely much on technology

They suggests several reasons that humans are subordinated by machines and technology divests people of their job.

>> People nowadays are subordinated by machines and technologies which divest people from doing their jobs.

However, I disagree with the above idea.

>> CORRECT

This is because, people can be preoccupied with more creative and productive works by leaving simple works to machines.

>> CORRECT

Also, total job magnitude has not diminished than previous time.

>> Work load diminished in a short period of time.
In conclusion, there is ,I think, any harm in relying on technology because we enhance the productivity of business remarkably.

>>  In conclusion, I think relying on technology remarkably enhance the productivity of business.