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2017-04-20 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Anyone in my life has never asked this kind of serious question to me directly before. That's why I relish the real meaning of the great question, whenever I get the subject of my English composition. Therefore, I think we have to live often answering our own question like this not to lose our right direction of life. Ironically, my number one goal is to prepare for death without regrets. Life and death are exactly opposite. However, the end of life is death and death is inevitable to all living things, so talking about life premised on death can be much more honest. I hate to die after living selfish, mean-spirited and disgraceful life. In order for me not to die so, I won't take my remained life for granted, but God's blessing. Achieving something great doesn't mean a lot to me. When I stand in front of God in the future, I really want to confess "It's a little embarrassing to say, but I tried to love God and people." Preparing for saying like this is my number one goal in my life.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Sir [이름]!

The priest in last Sunday\'s Mass at our cathedral was asking what our goal in life was.

Many people said they wanted to become a lawyer, a doctor, and do other professional jobs.

On the other hand, some of us said we wanted to live a stable life with a big house and a nice car.

Then, he said that we were so obsessed with earthly possessions that we forgot the eternal goal, which was to please God and be in heaven^^

Whew, that gave me goose bumps.

Anyone in my life has never asked this kind of serious question to me directly before.

>>CORRECT!
 That\'s why I relish the real meaning of the great question, whenever I get the subject of my English composition.

>>CORRECT!
 Therefore, I think we have to live often answering our own question like this not to lose our right direction of life.

>> Therefore, I think we often have to live answering our own question like this not to lose our right direction of life.
 Ironically, my number one goal is to prepare for death without regrets.

>>CORRECT!
 Life and death are exactly opposite.

>>CORRECT!
 However, the end of life is death and death is inevitable to all living things, so talking about life premised on death can be much more honest.

>>CORRECT!
 I hate to die after living selfish, mean-spirited and disgraceful life.

>>I hate to die after living a selfish, mean-spirited and disgraceful life.
 In order for me not to die so, I won\'t take my remained life for granted, but God\'s blessing.

>>In order for me not to die so, I won\'t take my remaining life for granted, but God\'s blessing.
 Achieving something great doesn\'t mean a lot to me.

>>CORRECT!
 When I stand in front of God in the future, I really want to confess \"It\'s a little embarrassing to say, but I tried to love God and people.\"

>>CORRECT!
 Preparing for saying like this is my number one goal in my life.

>>Preparing for this is my number one goal in my life.

>>Preparing to say this is my number one goal in my life.

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