homework

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Teacher Sophia

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First of all, only if you pay attention to others, you can lead your group.

>> First of all, if you only know how to pay attention to others then you can lead your group.
This is because, when a leader listens the other\'s opinion, especially gripe, the group can have stable situation.

>> This is because, when a leader listens to his group\'s gripe, the group can stay stable or stronger.

If a leader doesn\'t have concerns about the member\'s dissatisfaction, teamwork would end up breaking off. 

>> If a leader doesn\'t listen to the group\'s suggestion then the group will break off.
Second, a leader can get new idea in listening other\'s opinion.

>> Second, a leader gets new idea from his members\' opinion.

It is impossible for only a leader to create all the new ideas.

>> It is impossible for a leader to create new ideas.

So a leader makes environment for members to come up with any idea and thought without reluctance.

>> So, leader should encourage the members to share their ideas without reluctance.

Also however ridiculous, a leader should not discourage the members.

>> On the other hand, the leader should not discourage the members.

If so, the group can be active and animated.

>> As a result, the group will be active.
In conclusion, the role of a leader is not pushing members, but dragging members by listening.

>> In conclusion, an effective leader knows how to listen and persuading the members to participate.